Correct the errors in the following sentence--it's based on something I heard our Prime Minister actually say on the radio:
I wasn’t understanding what he means when in a speech he has
given Mr Harper was saying the funding will help them suffering from mental
illness and their family’s.
There are many possible ways to correct this sentence--lots of bonus points for everyone!
34 comments:
I did not understand what Mr. Harper meant when he said that the funding will help people suffering from mental illness and their families in a speech that he gave.
I didn’t understand what Mr. Harper meant in a speech he had given saying: “the funding will help the people suffering from mental illness and their families”.
I did not understand Mr Harper's speech when he said "funding will help people and families suffering from mental illness".
EDUARDO: The grammar is good, but there is a problem with the sense--think about who is suffering from what?
SARA:You're almost there, but think about capitalization and who is suffering from what what;-)
PETER:That's a great start--all you need to do is fix the punctuation and capitalization;-)
I didn’t understand what Mr. Harper meant in a speech he had given saying: “The funding will help the people and families suffering from mental illness”.
I didn’t understand what Mr. Harper meant in his speech, when he was saying the funding will help those suffering from mental illness and their families.
Yosua ENGL140.
I did not understand what Mr. Harper meant in a speech he gave when he said that the funding will help those who suffer from mental illness and their families.
SARA: The punctuation is better, but you still need to take a look at the underlying meaning here;-)
ZEINAB:You're on the right track here, but think about the punctuation and who is suffering from what;-)
YOSUA: You're almost there, but think about who is suffering from what;-)
I did not understand what Mr. Harper meant in a speech he gave when he said that the funding will help people who suffer from mental illness and their families.
I didn’t understand what Mr. Harper meant in his speech when he said, the funding will help those who are suffering from mental illness, and their families.
YOSUA:You still have not solved that underlying problem:-(
ZEINAB: With that version you need more punctuation (direct speech), and the underlying problem remains:-(
I did not understand what Mr. Harper meant when he said in a speech “funding will help those suffering from mental illness and those in their family who need help”.
I didn’t understand what Mr. Harper meant in his speech when he was saying:”The funding will help those people who are suffering from mental illness, and their families.”
I didn't understand the meaning in a speech Mr Harper gave about funding which will help people suffering from mental illness and their families.
I think this is better.
I didn’t understand what Mr. Harper meant in his speech when he said,”The funding will help those people who are suffering from mental illness, and their families.”
NATHAN:That's an interesting approach--it's a little long-winded, but the only grammatical problem is with capitalization;-)
ZEINAB: You're still not tackling the underlying problem of who is suffering from what;-)
PEGGY: Grammatically that's almost there; it's the underlying meaning is ambiguous. Can you sort out who is suffering from what?
I didn't understand his exact meaning in the speech Mr Harper gave in reference to the funding which will help the people suffering from mental illness and their families.
I did not understand what Mr. Harper meant in a speech he gave when he said that the funding will help families with people who suffer from mental illness.
I did not understand what Mr. Harper meant in a speech when he said, "the funding will help those suffering from mental illness as well as their families."
I didn't understand what Mr. Harper meant in his speech when he said,”The funding will help the families and the people who are suffering from the mental illness.”
In Mr. Harper's speech I didn't understand when he said "the funding will help people and their families suffering from mental illness".
Alexey ENGL140
I don’t understand what Mr. Harper meant when in a speech he gave he said the funding would help those suffering from mental illness as well as their families.
In a speech he was given Mr. Harper says the funding will help them suffering from mental illness and their families, I didn't understand what he means.
SUE: That's a great start--now sort out the ambiguity around who is suffering from what;-)
PEGGY:The underlying ambiguity is still there:-(
YOSUA:That's much better:-)
WILLIAM:Good--now can you fix the capitalization?
ZEINAB:That's better:-)
NICOLE: That's a great start--now can you fix the capitalization error?
ALEXEY:That's good apart from a problem with ambiguity as to who is suffering from what;-)
DIANE: You've made a good start, now think about the following items: using the passive voice can change meaning, verb tense, pronoun usage, and an underlying ambiguity as to who is suffering from what;-)
I didn’t understand what he meant when in a speech he has given Mr. Harper was saying the funding will help people suffering from mental illness and their families.
Alexey ENGL140
I don’t understand what Mr. Harper meant when in a speech he gave he said the funding would help those people who are suffering from mental illness as well as their families.
I didn't understand what Mr. Harper meant in his speach when he said: "The funding will help those who suffer from mental illnes and their families."
I didn't understand Mr Harper's speech when he mentioned that, "The funding will help those and their families suffering from mental illness".
DIANE:Good--you've solved all the problems except the underlying ambiguity;-)
ALEXEY: You still haven't got it:-(
MIRELA: Everything is good apart from an ambiguity--who is suffering from what?
KENNETH: Almost there--think about whether or not the families are suffering from mental illness;-)
I didn't understand what Mr Harper meant, when in a speech, he said, funding would help those suffering from mental illness and their families.
Alexey ENGL140
I don’t understand what Mr. Harper meant when in a speech he gave he said the funding would help families with people who suffer from mental illness.
I considered the phrase in the context that it is the individual and not the family, but a family could suffer as well with a child or parent who has mental illness. I could change it further to make it the individual.
I didn't understand Mr Harper's speech when he mentioned that, "The funding will help the families of those that suffer from mental illness".
Sorry... made an error
I didn't understand Mr Harper's speech when he mentioned that, "The funding will help people that suffer from mental illness, and their families".
PEGGY: That underlying problem remains--wait for the answer coming tomorrow;-)
ALEXEY:That's it!!
KENNETH: Almost--the last comma doesn't really solve the underlying ambiguity;-)
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