Learning to combine ideas into more complex sentences is an important skill in writing. There are many ways to do this--many possible bonus points! Try to combine the following three sentences.
Sentence 1: People have survived both Christmas and the New
Year celebrations.
Sentence 2: Many people probably ate far too much food and
are now trying to lose weight.
Sentence 3: Good times with friends and families often
involve eating too much food.
12 comments:
Now that people have survived both Christmas and the New Year celebrations, many doctors have realized that good times with friends and families often involve eating too much food. That is the reason because many people probably ate far too much food and now are trying to lose weight.
EDUARDO: You need to put these ideas into just ONE sentence, and I don't know where the 'doctor' came from;-)
People have survived both Christmas and the New Year celebrations, when they had good times with friends and families which often involve eating too much food, and for many far too much so they are now trying to lose weight.
Yosua ENGL140.
People have survived both Christmas and the New Year celebrations; however, good times with friends and families often involve eating too much food which means that many people probably ate far too much food and are now trying to lose weight.
SARA:There are two things to think about here--a verb tense error and punctuation;-)
YOSUA: Excellent sentence--well done:-)
People had survived both Christmas and the New Year celebrations, when they had good times with friends and families which often involve eating too much food; and for many far too much so they are now trying to lose weight.
SARA:"have survived" is not the problem--you need to look elsewhere;-)
Alexey ENGL140
People have survived both Christmas and the New Year celebrations, and it is not a surprise that many people probably ate far too much food and are now trying to lose weight blaming the fact that having good times with friends and families often involves eating too much food.
ALEXEY: That's a good way of putting it--well done!
People have survived both Christmas and the New Year celebrations, when they had good times with friends and families which often involved eating too much food, and for many far too much so they are now trying to lose weight.
Although people have survived both Christmas and New Year's celebrations, the good times involved in eating too much food with friends and families now results in trying to lose weight.
SARA: Better, but remember that you shouldn't use a comma before a dependent clause;-)
KENNETH: That's a good way of doing it:-)
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