4 April 2013

**GRAMMAR QUESTION, April 4th, 2013**


Correct the sentence below. There are many errors and many possible correct solutions--lots of bonus points for everyone!
 
Driving to the mall last week my car was near disappearing in a pothole: deciding to call the cities administration reporting the problem, I was hoping the problem was to be fixed quickly however its still their and its to be avoided.

16 comments:

Diane Corbeil said...

I was driving to the mall last week, my car was near to disappear in a pothole. I decided to call the city administration to report the problem. I hoped the problem to be fixed quickly, however the pothole's still there and it’s has to be avoided.

Peggy Ronning said...

Last week, when I was driving to the mall my car nearly disappeared into a pothole. I had hoped, after I had called the city's administration and reported the problem, that it would be fixed guickly. However, the pothole still needs to be avoided.

Alexey said...

Alexey ENGL140

When I was driving to the mall last week, my car was near to its disappearing in a pothole, so I decided to call the city administration and report the problem. I hoped the problem would be fixed quickly, however the pothole is still there and it should be avoided.

Veronica Baig said...

DIANE: You've made a good start, but there are several things to think about: writing a complete sentence, the passive voice, plurals, and punctuation;-)
PEGGY: That's a great start--the only thing to check is punctuation;-)
ALEXEY: You're on the right track--now check an extra word (2nd clause) and punctuation;-)

Diane Corbeil said...

Last week, I drove to the mall, and my car was almost disappearing in a pothole then I decided to call the city’s administration to report the problem. I had hoped the problem has been fixed quickly; however the pothole's still there and should be avoided.

George M140 said...

When I was driving to the mall last week, my car nearly disappeared in a pothole. I called the city's administration to report the problem, I was hoping the problem would be repaired promptly, but the pothole is still there and must be avoided.

Mirela said...

Driving to the mall last week, my car nearly disappeard in a pothole. I decided to call the city administration to repport the problem,hopping they would fix it quikly. However, the pothole is still there and it has to be avoided.

Katherine said...

Katherine ENG140

I was driving to the mall last week,when my car nearly disappeared into a pothole. I decided to call the city’s administration to report the problem. I was hoping the problem will be fixed quickly,however, it’s still there and it has to be avoided.

Veronica Baig said...

DIANE:A lot better, but you need to think about "my car was almost disappearing", and "has been fixed". The punctuation is much better, but there is still a missing comma;-)
GEORGE:Very close--there's a punctuation error. Can you fix it?
MIRELA:The only thing to fix is the spelling!
KATHERINE: A good start--now think about punctuation and a place where you need a modal verb rather than a straight verb tense;-)

Marina 143 said...

Marina 143
Driving to the mall last week, I discovered that my car was near to disappearing in a pothole. I decided to call the City's Administration to report the problem. I hoped the defect could be fixed quickly; however, it’s still there and it needs to be avoided.

Peggy Ronning said...

Last week, when I was driving to the mall, my car nearly disappeared into a pothole. I had hoped, after I had called the city's administration to report the problem, that it would be fixed quickly. However the pothole still needs to be avoided.

Peggy Ronning said...

Last week when I was driving to the mall my car nearly disappeared into a pothole. I had hoped, after I had called the city's administration to report the problem, that it would be fixed quickly. However, the pothole still needs to be avoided.

Veronica Baig said...

MARINA:Almost there--think about capitalization and the awkward phrasing of 'was near to disappearing".
PEGGY:You found that last comma:-))

Sandra Squires said...

When I was driving to the mall last week, my car nearly disappeared in a pothole. I decided to call and report the problem to the citie's administrator, hoping it would be resolved quickly. Unfortunately, the pothole is still there and should be avoided.

Sandra ENGL 143

Veronica Baig said...

SANDRA: That's a great start--now think about a possessive and punctuation;-)

KennethENGL140 said...

While driving to the mall last week, my car nearly disappeared into a pothole. I decided to call the city administration to report the problem and hoped that the problem would be fixed quickly, but it's still there and needs to be avoided.