Please
correct the errors in the following sentence.
There were
to much peoples at the mall so I was hurried up shopping, I was too hurried
that the shirt’s I bought's not big enough and I'm having to return them.
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There were too many people at the mall so I hurried up shopping. Because of the rush, I bought shirts that were not big enough and I have to return them.
Alexey ENGL140
There were too many people in the mall so I hurried up to shop; I hurried because the shirts that I had bought were not big enough and I had to return them.
Because there were too many people at the mall, I had to hurry up to shop; due to the rush, the shirts I bought were not big enough and I had to return them.
ZEINAB:Almost--can you fix the punctuation?
ALEXEY:You've changed the meaning;-) Also think about that infinitive structure and the punctuation.
YOSUA: There are 2 things to think about--the infinitive structure and punctuation;-)
Katherine ENGL140
There were so many people at the mall, so I hurried up to finish my shopping. I was in such a hurry, that the shirts I bought were not big enough and now I have to return them.
There were too many people at the mall, so I hurried up with my shopping, I was so rushed that I bought shirts that were not big enough and I will have to return them.
Option 1
There were too many people at the mall, so I hurried up shopping. I was in such a rush that the shirts I bought were not big enough. Now I have to return them.
Option 2
Too many people were at the mall today. So I rushed my shopping. I was so rushed that the shirts I bought were not the right size. They were too small, so I have to return them.
Option 3
There were too many people at the mall so I hurried up to shop; because I was in such a hurry I bought shirts too big for me, now I have to return them.
Option 4
I hurried up at the mall today because there was so many people there; now I have to return them,
because they were too big.
Option 5
I have to return the shirts I bought; the mall was so busy with people, I bought shirts too big for me.
There were too many people at the mall so I had to hurry up with my shopping. Since I was in such a hurry I bought shirts too big for me and now I have to return them.
There were too many people at the mall so I had to hurry up with my shopping. Since I was in such a hurry I bought shirts too big for me and now I have to return them.
Alexey ENGL140
There were too many people at the mall, so I hurried up shopping; the shirts that I bought were not big enough because I hurried, and I have to return them.
KATHERINE:Almost--there is a comma error, and think about the style when you use "so" twice;-)
GEORGE:Close--can you fix the punctuation?
NICOLE:#1, 2 & 5--good; the others have punctuation errors. Submit only one answer--that way, others have more options;-)
SALEHA:You're on the right track; the only thing you need to do is add some punctuation;-)
ALEXEY: Much better:-)
Saleha Ahmad ENGL 140 said...
There were too many people at the mall, so I had to hurry up with my shopping. Since, I was in such a hurry I bought shirts too big for me and now I have to return them.
There were too many people at the mall so I hurried up shopping. Because of the rush I bought shirts that were not big enough and I have to return them.
There were too many people at the mall so I hurried up shopping. I was in such a hurry that the shirts I bought were not big enough and I had to return them.
Marina 143
There were too many people at the mall, so I hurried up shopping. I was in such a hurry that the shirts I've bought aren't big enough, and I'm going to return them.
There were too many people at the mall, so my shopping was hurried. I was so rushed that the shirts I bought were not big enough, and I will have to return them.
SALEHA:Better, but there is a comma where it's not needed, and you missing one where it is needed;-)
ZEINAB:You're missing several commas there;-)
VALERIE:Good apart from the punctuation--you need to add some;-)
MARINA:A good solution--well done:-)
NAZNEEN: Another good solution:-)
There were too many people at the mall, so I hurried up with my shopping. I was so rushed that I bought shirts that were not big enough and I will have to return them.
I was in such a hurry when I was shopping at the mall because there were so many people there, that I bought shirts that were too small and now I will have to return them.
There were too much people at the mall, and then I hurried up to shop. I was too hurrying that I bought shirts not big enough, and I have to return them.
GEORGE: Better, but still not completely there;-)
PEGGY: All but the punctuation;-)
DIANE: You have good punctuation, but you have a couple of word confusion/usage errors;-)
There were too much people at the mall, and then I hurried up to shopping. I was in such a rush that I bought shirts not big enough, and I have to return them.
I was in such a hurry when I was shopping at the mall, because there were so many people there, that I bought shirts that were too small and now I will have to return them.
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