Sentence 1: The children were clamouring to see Santa Clause at the mall.
Sentence 2: The mall was crowded with Christmas shoppers.
Sentence 3: The line to see Santa was very long.
13 November 2014
*SENTENCE COMBINATION*
Learning to combine ideas into more complex sentences is an important writing skill. There are many ways to do this. Try to combine the following three sentences.
Sentence 1: The children were clamouring to see Santa Clause at the mall.
Sentence 2: The mall was crowded with Christmas shoppers.
Sentence 3: The line to see Santa was very long.
Sentence 1: The children were clamouring to see Santa Clause at the mall.
Sentence 2: The mall was crowded with Christmas shoppers.
Sentence 3: The line to see Santa was very long.
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The mall was crowded with Christmas shoppers, and the line to see Santa was very long, but the children, nevertheless, were clamouring to see Santa Clause at the mall.
Not only the mall was crowded with Christmas shoppers, but also the children, waiting impatiently in a very long line, were clamouring to see Santa Clause.
Good try, both of you!
But, Olena, in your sentence, the phrase "not only" needs the verb before the subject:
"Not only was the mall crowded..."
Michael, I was debating if I should go for noun or verb parallel. I decided to go with "the mall" vs. "the children." Was it incorrect? Or am I misunderstanding your comment?
Hi Olena,
In either case, the auxiliary verb is misplaced in your sentence. Here are some different examples:
"Not only was the mall crowded, but the children were screaming for Santa".
"Not only was the mall crowded, it was also very noisy."
"Not only did the shoppers push and shove, they also fought over the sales items."
"I visited not only the mall, but also the little shops along the road"
"Not only the mall but also the little shops along the road, were closed"
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