Sentence 1: Many people attended
Remembrance Day ceremonies on Nov. 11th.
United States
Sentence 3: Many people wear poppies to commemorate the flowers that grew in many World War I
battlefields.
6 comments:
Here goes:
In the United States, many people wear poppies in November to commemorate the flowers that grew in many World War I battlefields and attend Remembrance Day ceremonies on November 11th, also known as Veterans Day.
In the United States, November 11th is called Veterans Day and is also known as Remembrance Day which many people attend ceremonies and wear poppies to commemorate the flowers that grew in many World War I battlefields.
Many people attended Remembrance Day ceremonies on Nov. 11th, which is called Veterans Day in the United States, and they wore poppies to commemorate the flowers that grew in many World War I battlefields.
Great effort, everyone!
Audrey, watch your relative pronoun use. In your sentence, "which" forms the object of the verb ("attend"), so you cannot add "ceremonies" as the object.
Here is another possible solution:
Many people wear poppies to commemorate the flowers that grew in World War I battlefields and, on November 11th, many attended ceremonies for Remembrance Day, which is called Veteran's Day in the United States.
On November 11th many people attend Remembrance Day ceremonies to remember the soldiers that fought for their country, they also wear poppies to commemorate the flowers that grew in many World War 1 battlefields,this day is known as Veterans Day in the United States.
Watch out for the comma splice, Bailey. Also, try to post comments to an older blog edition after the newer edition comes out; otherwise, I may miss your comments!
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