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The little girl grew shy when her mother took her to see Santa at the mall. She was eager to get a present from the bearded man but found the experience frightening, and she was embarrassed when the older boys who lived next door began to tease her about her shyness.
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The little girls grew shy when their mothers took them to see Santa at one of the malls. They were eager to get presents from the bearded man but found the experience frightening, and they were embarrassed when the older boys who lived next door began to tease them about their shyness
The little girls grew shy when their mothers took them to see the Santa's at the malls. They were eager to get presents from the bearded men but found the experience frightening, and they were embarrassed when the older boy who lived next door began to tease them about their shyness.
Nichole found a few more words to pluralize, so I will split the mark on this one.
But, Nichole, be sure not to use a comma when making a plural. You should have said "Santas" not "Santa's".
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