Samirs always been borrowing his red stylish sporty-looking newer car to his brother who’s lending it while his old battered rust-spotted white vehicle is in the garage for repairing.
1. Name:
The name "Samir" might be unfamiliar, so you may not have realized that there shouldn't be an "s" at the end. It
doesn't make sense to use an apostrophe s because nether the verb "is" nor "has" belongs here, and there is no following noun that would make it possessive.
2. Word
confusion:
Lend and borrow: someone lends to you; you borrow from someone else. Note also that "Loan" is a noun, so you should avoid saying that someone has loaned something.
3. Verb
tense:
If you construe this as a typical or repetitive action, use the
simple present tense ("lends"). If you construe it as something that is goes on for a period of time, use the present progressive ("is lending"). If you
use the present progressive, put adverb ("always") after the auxiliary verb ("is always lending").
4.
Adjective word order:
The convention for adjective word order is opinion, dimension,
age, shape, colour, origin, material. This produces "stylish, sporty-looking,
newer, red car" and "battered, old, rust-spotted, white vehicle". Some of you might have wanted to group some of the adjectives and combine them with a
coordinating conjunction ("stylish and sporty-looking"). That’s another good way to solve the problem.
5. Verb
tense:
Whether or not the simple present or present progressive tense is used
for the verb in the first clause, in the second clause, the verb (which should
be "borrow") needs to be in the simple present tense ("borrows"). This means there
is no apostrophe s attached to "who".
6. Word
form:
After "for" do not use the gerund, use the basic noun in the either
singular or plural form.
Possible solution:
Samir always lends his stylish, sporty-looking, newer, red car to his brother who borrows it while his battered, old, rust-spotted, white vehicle is in the garage for repairs.
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