I wasn’t understanding what he means when in a speech he has given Mr Harper was saying the funding will help them suffering from mental illness and their family’s.
1. The underlying meaning:
What were people
suffering from? The current wording suggests that both the mental illness and their
families were the cause of suffering. Add some wording after “and” -- for instance: “and also help their families.”
2. Verb tense:
Instead of the past progressive tense, which
indicates that something continued to happen over time, use the simple past
tense, indicating that it happened at a point in time. Change “wasn’t
understanding” to “didn’t understand”.
3. Tense consistency:
With the first verb
in the simple past, keep others in the simple past, too, unless there is a good
reason to change. Instead of “means” (simple present tense) use “meant” (simple
past tense); instead of “has given” (present perfect) use “gave” (simple past);
and instead of “was saying” (past progressive) use “said” (simple past).
4. Modal:
For future possibility use
“would”, not “will.”
5. Pronoun:
“Them” is the 3rd
person plural, direct object pronoun. In this case, use “those” to refer to people
already mentioned or “understood”.
6. Plural:
Use the plural form “families”, and not the possessive “family’s.”
7. Punctuation:
Remember to set off a
non-essential (not grammatically needed) clause such as “in a speech he has
given”, and remember to use a period after the abbreviation "Mr."
Suggested solution:
I didn’t understand what he meant when, in a speech he gave, Mr.
Harper said the funding would help those suffering from mental illness and also
help their families.
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